DB post # 1 – When my brain processes information, it usually has to read a text more than once. For example, when I’m studying for an exam or reading a passage in order to fully understand, What point is being related across? I have to read it twice. The first time I read it I just kinda lightly skim through it and underline or circle certain things that may seem important to me or that I don’t understand. The second time I read it. I have to break each paragraph Or page down and I’ll take apart what each sentence means so my brain can process it correctly. When it comes to having to memorize certain things for test or exams, I normally just have to read it once and then write it down and and after that, I’ll just always remember it. I can’t really explain why but Once my brain remembers something, I’ll never forget it so like, for example, in my past psychology class Once I read the psychology textbook I just fully understood it, and I never seem to forget it. To give another example, I learned the anatomy of the entire human body, and I had to practice it for a while but now my brain just simply recognizes everything and I can recite everything. Usually, I do always think before I speak I like to carefully craft what I’m gonna say and like how I’m gonna order this sentence, in doing this, it allows me to really take a second to understand exactly what I’m saying and how it may come across to the other person. Out of all my three intelligences I would say the first one and the third one relate to me the best. I usually always take in math or science overall logic into what I’m thinking, and I carry that out into everything I do or say. My third intelligence which was Bodily learning, I would also say applies to me because I’m a very hands-on person I like watching videos, but nothing beats the real thing. For example, in my previous psychology class, we had the option to either watch. Did the section of a cow eye or actually perform it. I took it to myself to do both options, and I found that when my hands were dissecting the instead of watching it, I actually learned a lot more because it was directly in my hands. I will say I don’t think I could’ve did one without the other because I watched the video first I knew what I was doing, and I already knew all the different parts of the cow eye. 

DB post # 2 – Group Restatement of sentence – The assumption that all sites on the phylogenetic model evolve at one rate, between conserved and nonconserved, is an oversimplification of the complex process of the sequence of evolution in the eukaryotic genomes.

Feedback for Translation project –

Group 4 

Audience – Middlescholers 

Topic – knowledges of nature, the relationships between living things and plants( all things in nature) AEK VS TEK 

Questions – Which type of knowledge do we tend to use more; AEK or TEK?

How does it appeal to audience – presentation started off very engaging and strong for middle schoolers however over time that energy dies down a bit. I also like some of the vocabulary as it is more appealing to middlescholers (ex womp womp) 

Glow – Slides were very well organized and connected towards their topic, especially for middle schoolers there were a lot of fun colors and it wouldn’t be confusing due to their slides reflecting nature. 

Grow – I would have liked the speaking to have rotated more, everyone did speak but some people were more limited. 

Group 6 

Audience – Parents helping their kids study for a AP exam 

Topic – Cognitive limitations, ways their children think and learn as well as how parents can help their children study in many different ways. 

Questions – How can I tell the way my children learn, should we trial many different methods?

How does it appeal to audience – I think the opening of the presentation was very appealing to their anticipated audience, they made sure that the “parents” knew how they’d children can think regardless of how well they want their child to do. 

Glow – As cognitive limitations are a really big topic I think they way they explained all their information and didn’t totally bombard their audience was very well, they also explained their information in a way that their audience will know what they are talking about. 

Grow – I would have liked more consistency in the slides, they had nice pictures and the perfect amount of text but all the different colors and additives were a bit too much, and hard to focus on all at once. 

Group 5 

Audience – Parents helping out their kids with a science class 

Topic – plants/Algi, not completely sure on the topic however I know that they are talking about plants 

Questions – Is land plants the main part of this presentation?

How does it appeal to audience – I would say this would appeal to their audience if the parents already know this topic however I feel like there were a lot of big words and chunks of text that was hard for the audience to understand. Overall I would say the presenters knew exactly what they were talking about however they needed to translate it better. 

Glow – I like how their slides represent what their topic is, I also liked how they made sure to include everything about their topic 

Grow – I would of liked a little more eye contact, there was a lot of information they relayed to their audience but there seemed to lack eye contact to their audience 

Group 6 

Audience – High schoolers volunteering in a hospital 

Topic – Nanotechnology, a new era of cancer treatment, intending to treat breast cancer 

Questions – Can this help other diseases in the future? Will there be complications in shrinking the tumor instead of completely getting rid of it?

How does it appeal to audience – I would say they did a really good job attending to their audience not only consistently referring back to high schoolers but making sure all the big scientific words were explained fully. 

Glow – I really liked how organized the slides were, they made sure to include lots of pictures in order to keep their audience engaged and again really made sure that their audience understood what was being presented. 

Grow – I would want the slides to have less text on them, otherwise group 1 did a very good job on their presentation

Feedback for science movie projects –

Movie name – Black Panther 

Why is it science fiction – Advance science, Wakamda is new to the world. Uses of vibraniam. Vibranim is the main structure of their world. 

Interesting fact – wan Kama is very advanced so they have healing pods. Wakandas suit can absorb kinetic energy. 

Glow – I think the presentation was well organized and everyone spoke clearly and explain what was on their slides as well as the movie black panther 

Grow – I think there was a little bit of a lack of connection to science fiction, they explained the different types of advanced technology however I was missing the connection. 

Questions – Is the technology used in the film, adapting in the world today? If so is it still considered fiction 

Group 4

Movie Name – The Amazing Spider-Man 

Why is it science fiction – Flim contains genetic engineering and cross species experiments 

Interesting fact – There has been cross species engineering with a goat and a spider giving the goat some of the spiders dna 

Glow – Group 4 did a really good job in explaining all their science through the movie, they did not just name the different types of science but they made sure to clearly go through it in detail. 

Grow – Overall it was a great presentation however the only grow I really have is wishing the speaking was more spread out through the group, otherwise a really organized slideshow. 

Questions – As today we are already preforming genetic engineering what places it different in Spider-Man? 

GROUP 2 

Movie name – Passengers 

Why is it science fiction – Furistrist approach set on a ship and in space. Hyper sleep, the passengers are kept in pods to preserve their youth. 

Interesting fact – There are tons of study’s on trying to preserve human tissue to maybe one day be able to travel. 

Glow – overall it was a very informative presentation, I though the explanations on science were explained throughly and overall the presentation moved with a great flow 

Grow – The slides had a lot of information on them and it was very hard to read due to the small font size, I would just have less paragraph texts when creating slides. 

Questions – Would you ever be one of the people to volunteer to go to sleep for 120years and go to a different planet?

Research paper(Peer review of rough draft) –

TASK ORIENTATION 
Yes the essay did follow the task at hand, even though it is an outline the paper is very well organized and has all the proper points to clearly establish all the different points of her paper. The outline also has very nice flow and is easy to understand to the point where you will not be confused on what her research paper is about. 

STRUCTURE

The paper does have a clear thesis in the introduction, making a clear pave way into the next paragraph. The thesis statement also ensures to wrap up the introduction by restating her claim and her overall question. Due to this being an outline the paper does not have any topic sentences, however there are multiple bulletpoints for each section that describe what will be talked about in chronological order. 

SUPPORT AND ANALYSIS

Again since the paper is only an outline right now, the paper doesn’t have any sources right now. The researcher is still adding sources so thats in progress. 

ORGANIZATION

 As mentioned above the outline is very well organized and has such a nice flow, which makes it very easy to follow along. All the different subfields have corresponding bulkier points that clearly establish what the researcher is talking about and how they are moving onto the next part.

 CLARITY

 There was no confusing bulletpoin throughout the entire outline, all the points were clear and concise and very easy to understand. The clearest bulletpoint was the thesis statement, it was a very well written sentence and it clearly established the sum of the introduction as well as their question. 

PROOFREADING

 Overall there we’re no grammatical errors, and due to there not being any sources right now I can’t judge citation errors. 

OVERALL

 overall the outline was pretty solid, it was very easy to understand and flow through with no  confusion. There are some things missing like the references so the only thing I would fix is adding some sources.

Peer Review Presentations –

Name: Fatou 

Topic: Targeting Inflammatory Brest Cancer: Current new

treatments.

Thesis: New treatments for Brest Career & Chemotherapy, Surgery (modified Radical mastectomy or Brest Conserving Surgery), Radiation.

Questions: out of all the new cancer treatments you listed is there any One of

them that is the best?

GLOW: She definitely knew a lot about her topic and was able to go in depth about Brest Cancer; building off on her sides instead of Just repeating the feet’s on her slides.
Grow: I would suggest that she talks more freely (looking at her audience) 

Name: Ariful

Topic: Understanding and Managing ADHD in adults. 

Thesis: ADHD can be effectively managed with precise diagnostic standards, a Combination of different Psycholigal tests. 

Question: What is your age range when you mention adults; that is a very wide term so is the any break down? 

Glow: speaker had very good eve contact with their audience throughout the entire presentation and Hey were easily able to break down their paper. 

Grow:  I would suggest that the speaker break down the bigger words in their sides So it can be easier to follow along.

Name: Sadia 

Topic: The mind of a Serial killers how and why they act the way they do.

Thesis: even though all of usnare prone to certain Psychological and biological factors, how come we all don’t have the some actions (killing). 

Glow: The Speaker 100% knew there paper in and out, they made sure to have extensive knowledge about their topic and did not Just read off of their

slides.

Grow-the speaker had pictures and they should have knew how to explain them.

Question – what sparked your interest in wanting to research serial killers?

Name: Ken

Topic: Re-thinking IQ and Creativity in the education system. 

Thesis – the foundations for a successful educational ; Re-thinking IQ and Creativity in education. 

Question-do you thinks Certain Schools don’t express Creativity skills enough because they don’t have the resources or funds? 

Glow: I thought the speaker had very well and organized Slides with being cable to

have a nice flow throughout he. where Presentation. 

Grow: The speaker made Sure to glance at their audience from time to time but a little More of the Presenters time were mainly on their slides 

Name: Karen 

TOPIC: Bottled water vs tap water

Thesis: make your own decision when it comes to picking between the try tell both have pros and Cons.

Question: You mentioned that the tap water is filtered, do you think the “different taste” is in our heads?

Glow: the speaker did have some problems with their slides however they did not let that stop them and they easily continued a with their presentation that they had extensively information on it.

Grow- Overall I Would say this was a well organized presentation, however I was having a hard time looking for the thesis. 

Name: Nick

Topic: The Viability of the Many-worlds Interception

Thesis-quantum mechanics Challenges Classical Views of reality.

Glow  – the Presenter new a lot about their topic and made sure to not only read off their Slides but also give an extension on the

Paper.

Grow: I really enjoyed their presentation however I think there was so much going on in their slides that it was hard to focus. 

Name: Deyui 

Topic: sugar as the Leading cause of childhood cavities.

Thesis- diet, especially sugar Intake is the major cause of Cavity’s in Children. Question: I know your Paper focuses on Children however is it the same for adults or different considering let have adult teeth. 

Glow: I thought the Slides were very well organized and they had a nice flow to Understand what the speaker was talking about. 

Grow: The speaker should expand on explaining there slides because there were very big words that were not that Clear.

Name:kimberlin 

Topic: Breathing In Manhattan, the health risks of PM2.5 and its threat to public health.

Thesis: PM2.S has been Shown to be dangerous to human health causing

health issues especially in Manhattan.

Question: Do you thinks NYC (Manhattan) has the worst air quality. Do you think the government is purposely Making the air quality bad to kill the Population.

Glow: The speaker had really good eve contact with the audience and

Made sure to rely explain their slides Instead of reading off then. 

Grow: I would look over some of the Word Choices in the Slide because the jargon was a bit hard to understand. 

Name: yenders 

Topic: Should Marijuana be considered a medicine

Thesis: Marina Should not be considered a medicine even though a lot of people. believe it should. 

Grow: Overall it was at very good presentation however I would have wanted more bold sides, some Pictures, Color to really make then pop.

Glow: I really enjoyed this Presentation because the speaker made it Interactive with her audience and it was a very smart love by keeping her audiences involved in her presentation. 

Question-would you consider Cancer Patients to be the only people who should have it as medicine

Name – Bah 

Topic – potiental of 3d printed organs 

Thesis – 3D printed organs are a new way of helping people who are stuck on the transplant list for years and years, thus potentially ending thousands of deaths. 

Glow – The slideshow was very  organized and there was very informative. The speaker made sure to explain the specific process of 3D printed organs. 

Grow – I thought the slides had a lot of information on them however they were mainly just two colors and I would just say jazz it up next time. 

Question – If you needed it would you ever get a 3D printed organ? 

NAME – Nayat

Topic – Vasovagal Syncope 

Thesis – Vasovagal Syncope is a response of the nervous system caused by triggers such as stress, fear, anxiety, ect. 

Grow – I though the slides were incredibly detailed however I also feel that they had too much writing on them and it cause some attention away from the speaker.  

Glow – the speaker was very clear throughout their entire presentation and I thought their slides were incredibly detailed and creative. 

Question – Are you born with Vasovagal syncope or do you develop it later on? 

Name – Justin 

Topic – combining crisper and algal evolution 

Thesis – The smartest most scalable fix is to pair CRISPER gene editing with algae assisted evolution, if it’s guided by Erica oversite, long term support and ecological safeguards. 

Grow -next time I would suggest speaking a bit louder because it was harder to hear some of the big explanations in their slide show 

Glow – the presenter knew exactly what they were talking about and didn’t have to read of their slides but gave a bigger insite on their topic 

Question – Do you think this is a truly efficient way if there’s a chance on more pollution? 

NAME – Opie 

Topic – The rise of ADHD dishonesty in teens

Thesis – teens today face digital overload, increasing distractibility and possibly mimicking or worsening ADHD symptoms. 

Glow – You could tell the speaker knew exactly what they were talking about and they had a really nice flow throughout their presentation. 

Grow – The speaker should have more eye contact with their audience while they are presenting instead of just looking at their slide show. 

Question – Do you think there should be a specific age where a child is diagnosed with ADHD? 

NAME – Emily 

Topic – The biofield, traditional and scientific concepts of energy fields 

Thesis – The integrating of traditional and scientific knowledge provides a deeper understanding of how living organisms interact with biological energy fields. 

Glow – The speaker did a great job on explaining their  presentation making sure that the audience actually knew what they were talking about instead of just throwing facts. 

Grow – I thought the overall look of their slideshow was very nice however there were a lot of information on their slides and it took away from paying attention to the speaker and their slides at the same time. 

Question – Do you believe that one concept is better than the other? 

NAME: Jana 

Topic – Thesis Hidden Burden of cleaning OCD 

Thesis – OCD is a real ailment not just someone who wants everything to be clean all the time, the judgment around OCD. Should be replaced with empathy. 

Glow – I thought the penetration was very clear and concise, not too much where it’s overboard, but enough to pay attention to the speaker more than the slideshow 

Grow—I couldn’t hear the entire presentation as the speaker explained OCD, but I was able to piece together what the presenter said. 

Question – Is ODC a recessive gene, or is it something you can develop?